This week, SALLY CRONIN selected the words:
Eager & Hope
For Hope I chose wish, and eager I decided upon aim. I thought I’d try a new form the Diatelle…
“The Diatelle is a fun, syllable counting form like the etheree with a twist. The syllable structure of the diatelle is as follows: 1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1, but unlike an etheree, has a set rhyme pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba. This poetry form may be written on any subject matter and looks best center aligned in a diamond shape.”https://merrildsmith.wordpress.com/2020/07/10/flickering/
I decided just to have fun with this!
The poem is inspired by a sculpture of a deer I saw in Cambridge Botanical Gardens. Sometimes you spot a deer in the gardens but they disappear before you can study them for any time. This fellow is a little different! He’s there for keeps and I wondered if he missed the opportunity to roam! So, the poem below involves a chat between the deer and the sun!
On this eve
The air whispers
Not you, deer willow weave.
Hey, Sun! Quit gawping, swell sister
Bright yellow hot botanical drifter
Come over, plant your beams’s rays, aim your balmy kiss
Before I’m felled by the next twister
Cause me harm and makes me blister
Ain’t you so keen to please!
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Love it, Sis!
It’s a bit of fun! Lol. x
This was lots of fun! It sounds like March when the sun can definitely be a tease.
That garden looks like fun, too. I like that little deer.
We just visited a sculpture garden near Princeton, NJ on the most beautiful spring day last week.
Thanks Merril, glad you enjoyed. I love the garden and go there often. It is near where I work. The deer is a new addition and most welcome! Love sculptures and gardens and the spring brings the better weather which is always good!
Brilliant as always Sis 💜💜
Thank you so much Willow. <3 x
Now that’s fun! A fun conversation, for sure. How did you get your bitmoji to have movement? That’s really sweet. <3
Hi Colleen, glad you enjoyed! I just saved it as usual and added to the post. It’s in the bitmoji as an image with movement.
Nicely done, Marje. It didn’t look too hard until I saw the rhyme requirement! You pulled it off.
It was really tricky Diana. I don’t tend to write rhyming poetry but thought I’d give it a try. Thanks. <3
I love you made the poem into a conversation between the sun and deer. This was a lot of fun put into the challenging diatelle:)
Thank you Denise. I found this difficult but fun to do. x
“Aim your balmy kiss” ~ Ahhhh love it, Marje!
Thank you Christy. Glad you enjoyed! Lol.
I loved your whimsical poem, Marje! You made me smile from ear to ear. 😉 <3
Ah, that makes me smile too! Thank you Vashti. <3 x