This week, SALLY CRONIN selected the words:

Eager & Hope

For Hope I chose wish, and eager I decided upon aim. I thought I’d try a new form the Diatelle…

“The Diatelle is a fun, syllable counting form like the etheree with a twist. The syllable structure of the diatelle is as follows: 1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1, but unlike an etheree, has a set rhyme pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba. This poetry form may be written on any subject matter and looks best center aligned in a diamond shape.”https://merrildsmith.wordpress.com/2020/07/10/flickering/

I decided just to have fun with this!

The poem is inspired by a sculpture of a deer I saw in Cambridge Botanical Gardens. Sometimes you spot a deer in the gardens but they disappear before you can study them for any time. This fellow is a little different! He’s there for keeps and I wondered if he missed the opportunity to roam! So, the poem below involves a chat between the deer and the sun!


To leave

On this eve

The air whispers

Not you, deer willow weave.

Hey, Sun!  Quit gawping, swell sister

Bright yellow hot botanical drifter

Come over, plant your beams’s rays, aim your balmy kiss

 Before I’m felled by the next twister

Cause me harm and makes me blister

Ain’t you so keen to please!

You up-lifter

I believe

You tease


Do pop over to Colleen’s blog to see the challenge post and join in!

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Hi. Welcome to my blog: M J Mallon - Kyrosmagica Publishing. A blog about magic, books, writing, laughter, and much more! I'm a debut writer, my first YA fantasy novel The Curse of Time - Book 1 - Bloodstone is set in Cambridge. I write book reviews on my blog and on Goodreads. I have a penchant for travel and have relatives in far flung places, Australia, Malaysia, and Singapore, (my birthplace.) I grew up in in Bonnie Scotland, in Edinburgh, and now live in Cambridge. I love sunny, hot places, particularly Rome, Venice, Portugal, Barcelona, and I forgot to mention the sun drenched beaches of the Caribbean, how could I? I am lucky to have been blessed with two lovely daughters and a husband who I fondly refer to in this blog as my black sheep. Family joke! With my passion for travel, culture, beautiful beaches, good food, books, theatre, writing, and humour, I hope to keep you entertained. I'm loving every minute of this creative journey, please join me.

17 thoughts on “#TANKA TUESDAY #POETRY CHALLENGE NO. 216 @ColleenChesebro #SYNONYMSONLY #Diatelle”

  1. This was lots of fun! It sounds like March when the sun can definitely be a tease.
    That garden looks like fun, too. I like that little deer.
    We just visited a sculpture garden near Princeton, NJ on the most beautiful spring day last week.

    1. Thanks Merril, glad you enjoyed. I love the garden and go there often. It is near where I work. The deer is a new addition and most welcome! Love sculptures and gardens and the spring brings the better weather which is always good!

  2. I love you made the poem into a conversation between the sun and deer. This was a lot of fun put into the challenging diatelle:)

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